Wow. That escalated quickly. Pretty graphic too, but despite all that it was still a really fun watch. I can really see the improvement from the first episode you made all these years ago. Still a little hard to keep track the character switches in the story, but it's leagues better than before.
I'm trying to think of potential way to improve it, but the only thing that comes to mind are specific musical cues. Something like characters having either their own specific melody or instruments that represents them whenever it's their turn to be on screen.
I know sound design is tough because I haven't even made it to that stage myself with my animations. I'm still learning how to inbetween more efficiently. I'm not sure how you and your husband work with adding sound, but maybe you two can make a few experimental shorts where both of you can play around with the music and sounds to get something more harmonious with the animation. Kinda like what they did back in cartoons from the 20s, 30s and 40s, but you don't have to be all wacky and silly with it. Those techniques still apply with more serious animations (even movies and games do this), and you'd be surprised how these small changes makes a world of difference to an already great animation. Not critiquing the music, I'm pretty sure it sounds great on it's own. It's just with more involved animations like this it's better to be a little extra with it. But in the end it's just my personal preference.
The story in this is shockingly grim, and almost "realistic" with the way it depicts things. By the end I just wanted to hug these characters to make them feel better, and the credits left me feeling haunted. Not even sure if Flare is in a good spot either now that I think about it.
I'm struggling to even think of things to say about the story. I just hope the next episode is a little more lighthearted by comparison. Feels a little too soon to descend into madness with characters we barely got to know.
Although, I will say even if it's not meant to be funny, Flare sliding on her face for like a good 10 feet, and the guard accidentally chucking one of the kids up a tree gave me a good chuckle with how ridiculous it looked. I mean that guard must have been SWOLE to be able to chuck-em that high up without trying.
Overall, still pretty interested to see what will be in episode 3. I've got no idea what's gonna happen next, but I don't think these characters are gonna have a good time from the looks of things.